More good work!
Again, I can't think of any ways to improve the melody. I noticed only one minor orthographical mistake: Near the end, the jump up of three notes for the syllable "e-" of the word "even" should have a petaste instead of an oligon. I forgot to include an example of this in rule 2b of my
Orthography rules, so I just now added it and uploaded the new rules that include this example.